With Mother Earth in our hands it's might be time for a wake up call, what do you think?
I have to admit that I'm not one who's going in the front trying to save our planet. Of course I'm aware of the climate change trying to do my best with my contribution to save our planet, but am I doing my very best? Probaly not if I'm critical to myself. But what are the easiest things I can try to change immidiatly?
The first thing I can think of to improve my contribution to prevent a "little bit" of the climate change is to leave the car at home and go by bike instead. During the winter time I feel that I really need the car beeing able to get the children to school and daycare and myself to work in time. The spring is arriving even if it has snown today so it might be the time for me to take out my bike from the garage and make a "spring check" to see if everthing is in order with my bike. My children would love going by bike in the mornings even if we have to jump out of bed a little bit earlier. A bikeride in the morning for them would be like an adventure (they are 7 and 3 years old) Probably for me as well......getting my children ready in time and being in biking mood in every kind of weather. Am I in a biking mood five days a week? Probably not but if I decide to leave the car at home a couple of days a week and go by bike all the others I've defenetly done something little to improve the environment.
An improvement of the enviroment is absolutly necessary to do to be able to prevent the "Death" of our Planet. When Media talks about the climate threat I think it's to abstact and big to people so they don't know how to get a grip of it. Therefore some people feel that they can't do anything, what does it matter if I do something when my neighbour don't? Do you recognise yourself? Sometimes I do sometimes not but a lot of things for me depends on money and time.
I have to admit that the car is a time saver most of the times. When I run out of time ofcourse I use the car. What can I do to improve? Maybe I have to plan and schedule myself better? The money issue comes to me when I'm in the supermarket buying food for my family. The ecological bananas, vegetables, the milk, the eggs, the bread, the tea, the serials and so on costs a lot more to buy than the other products. Sometimes I make my ecological choice but not always. I'm getting better of picking the ecological alternatives but absolutly not always because of the price. At least it's a good start for me and my family and probably for all the other people on the Earth that little me buy some ecological articles in the Supermarket instead of none. Leave the car at home a couple of days a week and go by bike to work the other days.
Small things that are put togheter will make a different and I defenatley belive it's time to wake up.
Hi Viktoria!
SvaraRaderaYou have written about an interesting thing to do for the environment. I believe that many more should park the car and go by bike instead. It would certainly do a lot for the environment.
In your text you do very good paragraphs, they are not to short or too long. But sometimes I don’t follow the theme in them. You mix two things in the same paragraph. I think your text would be easier to read if you changed place on paragraph four and five, because paragraph five seems to belong to paragraph three. And also if you should split up paragraph five in two parts it would be easier to see what the paragraph is about.
You use a good language with words that are familiar. It is very nice to be able to read a text and understand what you are saying. Sometimes in your text I would prefer shorter sentences, then it would be even easier to read. I found a few miss spelled words but that is no big deal.
Overall I think you have done a good job and it was fun to read your blog!
Best regards
Anna-Karin
Hi Viktoria,
SvaraRaderaI agree with you that it is definitely time to wake up when it comes to climate change and sustainable environment. I recognise myself in you when you sometimes buy ecological food and sometimes not. I think that is rather common. My view is that most people think this is an important issue.
You start your blog with an inspiring question to the reader ending with the words “what do you think?”. Then you continue writing about what you do for sustainable environment. I, as a reader need never to answer your question.
The paragraphs should begin with a clear reason which ought to be linked to your introduction (here, your question) and then you discuss this reason in the paragraph. Sometimes you change subject within the same paragraph.
My advice to you is that you firstly write your blog in a word document since you spell some words wrong. When you are finished with your text you do a grammatically check up before you copy the text in to your blog.
Have a nice time in the sun and take it easy when you go bike riding with your children.
Best regards
Britt-Marie Melin
Dear Viktoria,
SvaraRaderaThanks for your blog! I agree with you that it’s time to wake up, but, like you, I’m a slow starter…
You have a very good introductory paragraph, telling the reader what you will write about, and you end it with a clear thesis statement. Your second paragraph relates very well to your thesis statement and is introduced by a fine topic statement. In paragraphs 3 and 4, however, you divert from your thesis statement. What you should have done, was to carry on with things that you can easily change in order to be environmentally friendly. Paragraph 4, for instance, could have been devoted to ecological products, introduced by a topic sentence on that topic. In your concluding paragraph, you could have given more strength to your argument by summing up your main points before making your final remark (which you do well, by the way!).
As to transitional devices, you use “therefore” in paragraph 3, but you could join up your texts a lot more by making more use of transitional devices.
When it comes to language, you should pay attention to subject-verb agreement, e.g. in “when my neighbour don't”. Also, there are some spelling issues, as in “immEdiatEly” and “bEing”. It might be a good idea to use the spelling check on your computer. Furthermore, snow isn’t an irregular verb, so it should be “has snowed”. Finally, think about prepositions, you get better AT things, not “of”.
See you in another blog!
Best,
Marika